The Young Detective.

Task Description: our class Room 1 literacy was writing a narrative. it was about (The Young Detective) we were told to finish the story off by writing it, as we were writing the story we had to highlight it black so it could show that it's our writing. After that we had to check if it had full stops and capital letters, we moved on peer editing which everyone did. All of us edited our partners writing.

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what was missing. As he was in the library he was still looking for what he had just then.

He kept wondering around the room looking for it. It was the missing piece to something? Adam looked back and saw weird eyes staring at him, he wondered what that was? He used his magnifying glass to see very well, the eyes looked like it was loose. Adam’s dad looked suspicious with him because he was staring at Adam the whole time thinking what he’ll do next. At that time he asked his dad if he knew where the key was.

The dad said “I don’t know what you’re talking about”

Adam kept on investigating for that key, it seemed like it was very special to him. Meanwhile, Adam’s dad grabbed him and hid Adam in his secret basement underground.

After that, Adam was stuck down there, he needed the key to get out, when it disappeared it went into the hands of the (Shadow Man) which was Adam’s dad.

He then bursted out the door with his magical powers, saying “What a pity.”

when he bursted out the door the Shadow Man dropped the key. In the basement Adam was trying to find a way to break out, he couldn’t. It was too hard for him.

He went towards the door to flip the switch on so that he could see properly, he saw a window and looked into the draws to see if there was a hammer, in the third draw he saw a hammer, he rushed to the window to smash it. Once Adam smashed it he ran after the Shadow Man to get the key, he stopped for a second.

He heard a sound rising, Adam looked back and saw the key he was amazed with his eyes, he didn’t know the Shadow Man dropped it when he bursted out of the door. As the Shadow Man was in the sky he had the summoning key in his hands, he was making the world turn into a weird world with abandoned places.

Adam was lucky enough to get the crossbow from the basement, he went outside getting a good aim at the Shadow Man’s head, in addition Adam missed getting his shots at the head multiple times. Adam made his last shot. The arrow shot his hands, as the summoning key dropped. He ran like he was about to catch the ball, like it was rugby.

At this point of time he had the summoning key, he had the missing piece to it.

Adam said “yes, I found the missing piece.”

He had to make this quick so this whole thing could end. After that, Adam put an end to this, to be continued...

Piri and the Tekoteko

Into the MIst.

In a world where a woman was wondering around the forbidden mysterious lake where no one won’t go. By the way she was looking for her old partner called Jesse Mccree. She wondered where he was when she wanted to get revenge on him.

This results In when Mccree left Ashe she felt lonely, concurrently she found some boys that were blowing up the trains. In the meantime Ashe had a crew of boys & her big upgraded robot named BOB. Ashe went to route 66 where the gas station & the broken houses with bikes were. 

She was walking then found a flying car below the building she went on It with her crew looking for Mccree. 

In contrast Mccree was eating his own yummy pie. he decided to leave to claim that he was looking for Ashe. finally he grabbed his hat & went outside to see if she was there or not.

Simultaneously Mccree was walking, a further point Ashe saw a walking shadow coming out of the dust. After that Ashe said Jesse Mccree It’s been a while I thought you just moved on.

Instead Mccree said “ All I want Is that crate & everything Is yours “ Ashe said this crate, she said to BOB to open the crate, but he didn’t open It, The reason why he didn’t open It, Is that they need the little triangle piece to open It.

First of all they waited & waited until the hour hand went on 12 ‘o’clock, when It went on 12 ‘o'clock they started shooting at each other.

But first of all he already knew that some of them were behind him & there was one with a rifle on the broken train & Mccree looked at the back of him, he saw a man with a rifle, the main reason for this is he knew that he was going to shoot him. As smoke was around them they couldn't see each other, next Ashe said ‘’ Mccree give me your weapon. But Mccree saw a bunch of grenades together after much thought he grabbed It in addition & Mccree said" OK Ashe i’m giving my weapon.

But he didn’t in conclusion he threw the grenades to her crew & herself then Ashe said "OH SHOOT " in conclusion mccree shot the grenades, meanwhile there was a big boom!" For example mccree took bobs head off & tied Ashe's hands with the rope.

Mccree grabbed bobs head, claim that he put the rope on the bottom of bobs head, after all he put bobs hat on his head and mccree took the crate for instance he could put the piece on it. In due course this strange robotic female came out of the crate.

In other words mccree said ‘’ welcome back partner. The robotic female said ‘’ mccree where are you going" In the end he said  "I got a call, there bringing the band back together. Therefore they need me, but really they need you.

Finally Mccree said’’ goodbye partner. Mccree went on Ashe's motorbike & went off & said to his partner  "say hello to the scientist, & the robotic female said  "Who, whatever Mccree said I believe that he went off looking at Ashe & him when they use to be partners when they were young.

I believe that Mccree went past Ashe & her crew, even bob. In a loud voice Ashe shouted at mccree saying “Hey Mccree that’s my bike Mccree. Oh I hate that guy. Eventually she looked at bob saying “what are you looking at.”

After that she took bobs hat off his head.

Also Ashe had bad look on her face when she saw Mccree go past them

          THE END.

     

Iron Tamariki.